Chapman Context Paper - Key Learnings

Dear Rick,

A nicely written paper. You write clearly and carefully. You have done a good job identifying a number of different opportunities. Your paper is nicely organized and first person without being colloquial. Your introduction is good and the process you follow to arrive at your conclusion is logical and convincing.

The addition of a large number of opportunities reduced your space to develop a smaller number of opportunities in more detail. For example, you only explore feasibility, urgency and impact in any detail for your final opportunity.

Your force field analysis is clear but would have benefited from more detail indicating the relative strength of the different forces and how your anticipated intervention would change the balance of those forces.

Your grammar and spelling is generally excellent. Your style is clear and flows well. There were a small number of minor grammatical mistakes and a larger number of referencing errors that will need to be fixed.

Overall a very well written paper.

GRADE - A-
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Dr. Mark Chapman, Assistant Professor of Research Methods
Tyndale Seminary, 25 Ballyconnor Court, Toronto M2M 4B3
(416) 226-6620 ext. 2208
http://www.tyndale.ca/seminary/dmin/

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You need some description of how you arrived at these conclusions. That is, what was the data that led to this analysis?

Footnotes always go on the outside of sentence ending punctuation.

Generally you don’t need to provide a reference to commonly understood theories. In this particularly case there are, confusingly, several different theories that go by the name “system theory” thus a reference is necessary.

“E.g.,” is only used in parentheses (see Turabian 21.8.1)

Good potential to connect this with something about yourself or the neighbourhood but the connection needs to be more explicit here (e.g., point to your subsequent comparison).

You need to explain specifically why signage in multiple languages reduces social cohesion.

There is undoubtably a change in the education system over time. However, it is not clear from your argument how this has specifically affected a culture gap.

Commas go inside of quotation marks.

Cite this as personal correspondence. (ref. an email correspondence). ??

This figure would be more meaningful if plagiarism was plotted against total enrolment (e.g., 1 of 4 is worse than 1 of 40).

Use Turabian format. ??