Dear Rick,
A nicely written paper. You write clearly and carefully. You have done a good job identifying a number of different opportunities. Your paper is nicely organized and first person without being colloquial. Your introduction is good and the process you follow to arrive at your conclusion is logical and convincing.
The addition of a large number of opportunities reduced your space to develop a smaller number of opportunities in more detail. For example, you only explore feasibility, urgency and impact in any detail for your final opportunity.
Your force field analysis is clear but would have benefited from more detail indicating the relative strength of the different forces and how your anticipated intervention would change the balance of those forces.
Your grammar and spelling is generally excellent. Your style is clear and flows well. There were a small number of minor grammatical mistakes and a larger number of referencing errors that will need to be fixed.
Overall a very well written paper.
GRADE - A-
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